Hey everyone,
I'm writing an application letter for a post as a product specialist at Achema Pte Ltd. The details of the advertisement can be found above. My application letter can be found below. Thanks!
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Adam Tan
34 Bouganville Green
Singapore 456123
4th February 2010
Mr. Charles Tan
Human Resource Manager
Achema Pte Ltd
Foo Wah Industrial Building #03-03
45 Jalan Pemimpin
Singapore 577197
Dear Mr Tan,
RE: Application for position as Product Specialist at Achema Pte Ltd
I should like to be considered for the post as a Product Specialist (Life Science) with Achema Pte Ltd, as currently advertised in the National University of Singapore (NUS) Career Centre website. I am a fresh graduate from the National University of Singapore (NUS), majoring in life sciences. I enclose a CV which gives full details of my educational history and qualifications to date. The following are the salient points supporting my application.
Being a life science major allows me to be very familiar with laboratory equipment, consumables and software. This will allow me to effectively manage the sales of these products and in handling the equipment. My internship stint at the Temasek Life Science Laboratory has allowed me to fully utilize the equipment that is available to a researcher. I was also in charge of stock-taking during my stint there, and it has made me aware of the necessities that a research institute will need in general to run its labs. This gives me the added knowledge when it comes to selling these products to top-end research institutes.
Having headed a team of 9 in a life science research competition during my college days has given me the necessary exposure for carrying out a large scale project as well as giving public presentations. This will put me in good stead when carrying out my duties in marketing projects.
I have also been on a summer exchange programme to the University of California as an undergraduate. I was also given adequate lab experience over there. I hope to use the knowledge and exposure gained to help the company expand its market overseas, like the United States. I hope to be able to translate my passion and desire to give the company a boost in this respect.
I am available to discuss the post in person and perhaps go through my credentials in more detail. Thank you for your time.
Yours Sincerely,
Adam
Hey Bryan,
ReplyDeleteThe overall content of your application letter seems okay to me, but maybe you can try to show more about your marketing knowledge if possible? I mean have you for instance taken any marketing or other business related module? If so, perhaps you can elaborate on that.
In the 4th paragraph, rather than saying 'I was also given adequate lab experience over there', you can try to put it in a better way like 'I got a chance to refine my laboratory skills'. Also, when you mention that you have been on exchange, maybe you should try to explain more on how your experience helped you to improve your skills. Maybe you learnt how to communicate with people from different cultures effectively and to adopt to new environments quickly.
These are just my thoughts. Let me know what you think.
Cheers,
Madhu
Hey Bryan,
ReplyDeleteRelating your relevant past experience in accordance to the job responsibilities is a good way to attract employers in reading your resume. By giving them an idea of what you have been exposed to in your previous role as a intern, it might generate their interest in calling you up for an interview.
Giving example on how you have led a team of 9 in a life science research competition can further substantiate the responsibility needed in this job i.e. product management as well as good presentation skills. Perhaps you can also elaborate on other necessary traits that are required for this job in a greater detail. You can emphasize on your good communication skills and problem solving skills to represent a better fit for the job you applying for. If possible, prior sales experience that you have can be included in your description to show the employer how you can grow their business and will be willing to take up this challenge.
Maybe you can write “I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss my qualifications and past job experience in greater detail with you in person. Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.” instead of “I’m available ...” It sounds more polite to me, what you think?
Hi bryan,
ReplyDeleteI think that your application letter is well written!
I think for your paragraph 3, the 1st sentence is too long, it’s like a 30 words sentence without a punctuation, maybe you could try to break up the sentence so that the main points can be put forth more clearly, which are the skills you’ve acquired during the competition. So like eg ‘During my college days, I headed a team of 9 in … competition. It has given me the …’. Also, since you head in the competition, you could write something about your leadership qualities too. In addition, I think you could include you’ve taken ES2007s, Professional Communication module, to further prove that you’re an excellent presenter and possess good communication skills that is necessary for the job.
Yup, that’s all, it’s really a good piece of application letter!
Cheers,
guoren
Hey everyone,
ReplyDeleteThanks for your kind feedback. I thought that the feedback that you have given was really useful. Yes writing an application letter indeed needs quite a fair bit of refining as even one word can bring across a totally different meaning or perception. Thanks!
Cheers,
Bryan